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This is one I just finished. Criticize / Critique at your leisure.
The world would go on, nothing would change
No one would notice a boy died from his pain
They wouldn't care, they wouldn't see
Wouldn't know what was wrong with me
He was unbalanced, and disturbed they would say
Never questioning what happened that day
In the end the boy knew he couldn't tell
The secrets he kept within his own private hell
So they'll mark him down beside his brothers
An anonymous number among countless others
very sad...very deep...
i hear your screams, and you weep..
Thank you twitch.. you have a pm hun
hugs
Damn twitch, I would notice. If you need or want to talk, contact me.
Twitch..
Very dark and deep. I actually like it a lot. Though the pull is sometimes strong there is always that shred of hope.. sometimes its all you have to hang onto. But hang on brother, hang on.. because the world would notice.
all i have to say is WOW, and what a great expression of such powerful, hurtful, and yet so true emotions we can feel.