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Describe for me, set the stage for the perfect seduction. Your can write from the point of view of the seducer or the seducee, or from a third person stand. Remember to layer all the senses, draw me into the scene.
Ready, Set, Write!!!!!
Wow!
Perfect; seduction -- two words loaded with possibilities.
Thinking cap on!
anonymouse
It's impossible to describe a perfect seduction without resorting to metaphor. You could say it's like the most delicious ice cream. A tantalizing treat of unexpected taste sensations. It's rich creaminess is familiar however, the tang of boysenberries is what really captivates you. The temptation it instills is irresistible; the surrender to this temptation overwhelms your senses.
[I need to start again, but I thought I'd post this anyway]
anonymouse
Really? Read mine, and what is wrong with metaphor anyway?Quote:
Originally Posted by anonymouse
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Originally Posted by Rhabbi
hehe - nothing, I guess.
"Seduction is a metaphor - life provides its analogies" - me :)
anonymouse
My first asignment did not turn out as planned. I wanted to tell a story about the power of seduction, about being powerless to resist. It turned out, well, creepy.
But I went with the flow and that is usually a good thing. So here is my first asignment:
Perfect Seduction
She appeared in a blaze of beauty. The warm summer breeze flaunted her blonde mane as she approached me. Her dress flowed out loosely behind her but was pressed firmly against the front of her delectable body, forcing an unchaste thought into my brain that I could not, would not, suppress. I hated myself at that moment; how could I do this vision of perfect beauty justice? How? How, if the wind was outlining not only her bountiful breasts but even hinted at her nipples? No man is that strong.
She did not know that I was watching her, not then, was unaware of the fact that I could have simply reached out, not only to hold her at arms length but to pull her in and never let her go. To ravage her in my arms, to feel the soft warm flesh yield before my voracious fingers, to explore what could be mine, should be mine.
Even though I could see every mole and every little scar in a moment of crystal clarity, I knew that her skin was perfect. I could not even conceive it in any other way. My eyes tore away the thin summer dress and explored her fully, drank in her hidden beauty that was only bared for me.
As we passed one another, she granted me a fleeting smile, flashing her white teeth at me. Did she know that I had nothing but her taste on my lips? That my hot breath, heavy with desire, mixed with hers? That our insatiable tongues danced around one another without ever leaving our mouths?
Like a bar fighter who is kicked with steel capped boots once he is down, her scent overwhelmed as I came downwind. I staggered and almost fell as her perfume assaulted me; the musky, bittersweet fragrance of her sweat expressed everything I needed to know. I knew how it would be to trace my tongue over her glistening skin, guided only by her scent like a blind animal.
The swaying of her hips before my weary eyes and the rhythmic ‘toc toc’ of her heels had me hypnotized like a snake. I could not turn away, could not let her walk away like that. It was the perfect moment to strike.
I turned away.
She did not know that I was watching her, not then, not ever.
Hello Satan_Klaus,
I really like this. You refer to it as 'creepy' but in fact, that's what makes the piece so readable (for me). There's lots of imagery evoked throughout, and a great closing line. :)
anonymouse
"And lead us not into temptation but deliver us from,"Quote:
Originally Posted by Satan_Klaus
Nice job, great concept, just a little disappointed in your strength of character! ;) next time waver a bit:)
Mad Lews
was that a snake metaphor I saw?
"Is this an apple I see before me?"Quote:
Originally Posted by Mad Lews
All rhetoric aside, it's a bright red one, and ... um ... nevermind...
anonymouse
Herr Klaus,
If this is what happens when you "go with the flow", then you should do no other. It does have a touch of creepiness about it, but a good kind of creepiness, a warm shiver running up the spine kind of creepiness.
Marvelous use of imagery. i could feel that knocked-for-a-loop sensation. i really enjoyed this. i do hope you see her again, and maybe continue the tale.
There were precious few nits to pick, proof of the old adage that foreigners tend to learn our language better than we do.
i will get your next assignemnt up this afternoon or tomorrow.
roseQuote:
Originally Posted by Satan_Klaus
i like metaphors, hit me with your best shot (metaphorically speaking). How would the "perfect man" go about seducing you in the "perfect way"?Quote:
Originally Posted by anonymouse
Yes it has this 'human touch' as the chracter himself admits that he is struggling. I think that makes it easier to identify with him.Quote:
Originally Posted by anonymouse
Besides, the difference between a good man and an evil one is not what they desire, its what they do about it.
Satan_Klaus
Yes this one was really a 'flow' story. As I said, I wanted to write about the power of seduction and being powerless before it. Quickly, the story got a mind of its own and decided that being powerless allowed the monsters to come out to play. I'm not unhappy about it, its just different than I had imagined.Quote:
Originally Posted by Dragon's muse
I don't think I could do a sequel to that story, though. A good story is not always enriched by adding to it and this one feels complete as it is, a standalone encouter. In addition, a sequel would belie the powerful last sentence.
And thank you for kind words and editing work. I really appreciate what you are doing for us Rose.
Satan_Klaus
Klaus,
This is a great story, and perfectly illustates the line between fantasy and reality by never crossing it. Thumbs up all the way.