Yes, I did ask. And thank you! That's precisely what I want. I'm not offended or anything, because I can relate. If I said I didn't like...oh...beastiality, for example, I wouldn't want someone getting all ticked off at me, because it's out of my control. With Spitman, I can tweak my story, maybe just a little bit, to something he might perhaps enjoy a slight amount. Maybe it will do nothing. Essentially, I want everything TO be said about my story to actually BE SAID. Needless to say, that's kind of impossible, for everything to be said. But I want as much information as possible.
For example, when Spitman said it read too much like a factual account, that tells me that I have achieved a level of realism that gives the story an atmosphere of full truth, rather than any of the story's elements stretching the limits of possibilities. That is what I strive for. I remember a thread fairly recently that had to do with "stories that make you cringe in disbelief". This thread noted flaws in a story otherwise realistic, i.e. the story was supposed to be real but some of its content was just impossible to believe. My goal is to get every detail of the story across without the reader questioning its possibility of happening.

I hope what I wrote made sense. I'm kinda tired at the moment, so you never know...

PS-Thank you, Spitman, for your input about the story.