Thank you for the revisions, Dragon's Muse.

The accursed comma. I see you have them and aren't afraid to use them. hehe I'm curious as to why you inserted a comma into this line:

"I see you chose the chicken, as well," said Mark.

I'm actually going to rewrite the line to this:

"I see you also chose the chicken," said Mark.

With regards to semi-colons and dashes, I used to use dashes all the time but have been trying to ween myself off them. I understand the 'independent clauses' use of semi-colons, but aren't they also correct as a 'soft' period or full stop? ie: a break in the flow that is longer than a comma but shorter than a full stop.

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