Assignment 1 by anonymouse

[anonymouse]

OK, since Dragon's muse has done the picky parts, I will just flow with my thoughts.

First, I seem to remeber a post about a perfect seduction requiring metaphores. I must have missed them here. lol

hehe

I really love the way that you brought about the seduction is such a subtle manner. The only reference to sex in the story was her thoughts about the movie, and those only if you know the movie. (I hope I am thinking of the same movie.) I really like the way he put two and two together and the way he looked at her after she replied to the question.

When I first starting writing for an internet audience, I used to write 'stroke stories'. I still write them occasionally however, I personally prefer to write the sort of stories I like to read -- ie: stories with more subtlety. The audience for these isn't as large as it is for stroke stories but, as they say in show busines, 'a small audience is the cream of a large audience'.

RE: the movie, yes, it's the one that starred Maggie Whateverhernameis. I had originally intended to make a stronger connection and now that you've mentioned it, I may put those lines back in the story.

And then:

Perfect ending!

The only real critique I would have is writng in The End like you did. I do not think it was neccessary, just leave the reader wanting more, and wondering if it was coming.

That was just my silly little joke

anonymouse