Quote Originally Posted by Dragon's muse View Post
This is truly a beautiful piece of prose. You have a wonderful and distinctive voice that resonates.

You work in backstory without becoming needlessly expository. The healing waters scene is truly inspired and draws the reader in.

One of my favorite things you have done here is the extended metaphor of the wall.

Thank you! I never thought about, it or saw it that way I just rolled with it. I love the tub scene, the feeling of water coming out of your ears is something to experience...thank you so much for the nice words.





All in all, a wonderful piece. Yes, i did find some nits, but not many. You will never get all of your own nits. After a decade of professional writing, i still rely strongly on my own editors and a group of writer friends to point out to me where i need to work on things. Not even the exceedingly admirable Mr. HDean finds all of his own. (ducking quickly behind a bush)

This has made me feel much better, as I tend to write full speed ahead; I do not know how to type well, and my nit ridden first drafts are slowly honed into something sharper. You and the exceedingly frightening HDean and the understandably confusing MadLews, ya'll have inspired me to edit more and try to get most of the nits. It is good to have support like this.





It is just about a hundred times easier to see the tiny technical things in other people's work than it is your own. Make it as good as you can make it, then gracefully accept the help of others. You have that part down.

I tend to notice mistakes but not mind them in other people's work if it is a good story. All of your help has been gracefully digested and I only hope that you feel you spent your time well with me. I feel much more sound in some areas (pronouns, semi colons, noticing when I get confusing...) and I think I got a lot out of this level.





All this being said, i am kicking you upstairs to Level II. i will send the emails to get you access this morning. Don't forget to come back to see us and critique/encourage those following behind you. Congratulations.

rose



So rose, beautiful muse, i thought I responded to this when it was posted...I wrote a long, eloquent thank you and the site ate it.

I liked the assignments, even the one I wasn't as interested in, the car wreck/girl meets boy...I am going to miss you! I will certainly give commenting on the work of others a stab...I am just so hungry to write it is not so easy for me to write reviews and such. I do know it helps and I should be helpful, it is the right thing to do.

Life is so interesting. I wish there were two of me, so one of us to find time to do the right thing all the time.

This has helped me so much. Thanks rose.

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