Enchantments

[Alex Bragi]

This is very good, in my opinion, muse, very creative and well written, with none of the exaggerated blood, gore, and sex scenes that so many stories, here at the library, often rely on so heavily. None of the overused clichés and metaphors either which is refreshing in itself. And that opening paragraph: ”... stamping the cold from her feet. The bitter chill winds had whipped her coppery tresses into tangled snarls down her back; windburn smeared her pale cheeks with red...” painted such an exquisite picture in my mind’s eye. I just had to keep reading from there, and I wasn’t disappointed.

Some parts (chapters) did feel a little disjointed to me, also, but I’m not really sure why. I think, perhaps in a couple of instances the previous chapter didn’t feel quite complete—like it had been cut too short or was missing a closing sentence, or maybe it was just because I was reading all of a single continuous page?

I don't necessarily think what's already been written needs a whole lot more, in fact, I actually disgree with the previous reviewers who say it needs "fleshing out" (Sorry, guys). Please, again this is just me, and my opinion, but while I like the general setting and characters to be clear from the start, I also kind of like like stories where the details are feed to me gradually. I like to read and pick up little bits and pieces of information along the way. It's part of what keeps me interested.

Keep it coming muse, this is top notch.