I am in agreement with Mad on this. The report works well, though the gun caliber - I noticed how you stepped everything up one notch - is a bad choice. Wounds from a 22, straight into the gut, are not likely to end with death unless they hit a bone and bounce around. Also, hitting someone square in the face with a .22 is likely to just ricochet and injure another party. I would suggest upping the caliber to at least a .38, 9m, .45 or a .357 mag. Remember, the purpose of the ruse was to kill or severely maim. He would be looking to do major damage.

Also, in the case of entering a building with a loaded gun that results in death, the crime he would be wanted for is 1st degree murder, not 2nd degree. it is assumed, by law, that anyone committing a crime, while armed, has intent to commit murder. Thus, any death resulting from the crime is malice afore thought.

Yeah, I studied criminal justice in college.

Also, the report is pretty much accurate as to how it would go down except for his height, which would be revealed as an approximate height. Also, you can do the report as a legal brief, instead of as a flat and lifeless report. That is, make your report and then brief it. This will make it shorter and more appealing to read. You don't need to list all the people either, only the ones who were directly involved - either by getting shot or handing over money, etc. The rest can be referred to as witnesses.

Dean