Razor7826 icebreaker thread

[Mad Lews]

Very good RZ,
I realize the seven sentences were a little awkward but you managed to fit them in nicely for the most part. While Charlie didn't end up a hero per say he did learn and grow so that was a plus. All in all I'd say you covered the assignment in an appropriate time frame.
I just don't understand why your evil twin was whining about it. I'll go over it in more detail today and we can work on coming up with a new assignment.
Yours
Mad Lews

[Razor7826]

Very good RZ,
I realize the seven sentences were a little awkward but you managed to fit them in nicely for the most part. While Charlie didn't end up a hero per say he did learn and grow so that was a plus. All in all I'd say you covered the assignment in an appropriate time frame.
I just don't understand why your evil twin was whining about it. I'll go over it in more detail today and we can work on coming up with a new assignment.
Yours
Mad Lews

Okay, 'my evil twin's fears were justified at the time I was writing it.

1) The story was completely unsatisfying until I wrote the last quarter of it, which helped Charlie go from completely unlikeable to at least having learned a valuable lesson.

2) It developed a lot on editing, namely in flow of dialogue, and I actually had to cut about thirty words to meet the limit.

3) I truly did hit a wall that I've never hit before while writing this assignment. Every other Writer's block assignment kept the same vision, beginning to end, but this one required a significant change of direction right in the middle. When I started writing, I intended it to just be Charlie telling the story to God and defending his actions.

[Mad Lews]

Hi Razor,
I've read over your "Bad Endings" series as well as some of the reviews.
First you need to realize that not all reviewers are kind but you can still learn from them. The most common complaints were too short, too simple. I'd say they are being a bit picky but they are the audience so we have to give it some credence.
In general I think you write event/plot based stories. These will always be simpler and shorter than character based stories. You'll notice that the assignment I gave you was about characters and not so much about the events.
You may have had a little difficulty with it but you ended up getting into the characters heads; and more importantly dragging the reader in with you.
In general this kind of story telling is more complex and nuanced. Sort of the difference between a Tom Clancy Novel and a Steven King Series. Finding the proper balance between the two methods is important. There is a thread of short stories on the forum that shows you can get inside your characters head without being too long winded,
http://www.bdsmlibrary.com/forums/showthread.php?t=3173
Sooo...
Pick one of those bad endings, The one you dislike the most. Let me know which one you choose and let's see what we can do with it OK.
Mad Lews