Feed back for this story, please

[Venom]

Thank you for your comment, lucy, especially since the story is not to your taste.
Visualising the main character's thoughts as italic lines is indeed a stylistic experiment of mine.

[John Tagliaferro]

Thank you for your comment, lucy, especially since the story is not to your taste.
Visualising the main character's thoughts as italic lines is indeed a stylistic experiment of mine.

I like your stylistic experiment, but maybe you should warn the reader with a note at the beginning of the story? I prefer to use single quotes and a "thought tag" before or after. Haven't gotten any complaints on that yet.