It's been said that snuff and extreme are two ratings that people will automatically skip over, and I'm afraid that may be what's happening with this piece. There's nothing extreme about it (I think I may have hit the wrong button when I submitted it--computers are not my friends) and the snuff...technically, yeah. Very technically.

The questions I want answered--and my thanks to my one reviewer thus far, I'm glad you liked it--are these:

Description in the story--too much? Did it slow the story down?
Would you be interested in reading more of this story? Are the characters believable, and well-developed...taking into consideration the brevity? Dialogue--realistic?

And anything else you consider relevant--thank you for your time. Impatience is one of my many faults, and my writing is the work of my heart.